Creativity Hacker

Today we see that galloping I disease isn’t just about the narrator—other characters can trigger it too. What I gleaned about the story: Damian sees dead people. Like his sister, Beth, who might be a vampire. And together they fight crime. I think. Find this book on…

…this is giving it a case of Galloping “I” Disease as well. (See this previous review for more about that particular problem.) Just to be sure, I flipped forward a few more pages, and kept seeing it. Repeated headwords. Repeated sentence structures. Subject verb noun. Subject verb noun. One…

…border_color=”#A3C194″]WTF #2: Galloping “I” disease.[/dropshadowbox] Analysis: The simple declarative sentences combined with a 1st person narrator creates a steady stream of “I” pronouns. No one sentence was problematic, but they occur very frequently, often with three or four “I“…

…been seeing a lot of what I call “Galloping ‘I‘ disease” lately, and this sure looks like another candidate. Although it was possible it was being done for a sort of fancy rhythmic effect. On closer examination, I didn’t see any rhythm in the sentence structures, and then further down the page I…

…it broke immersion. Kudos: 1st person indie narrative often suffers from the Galloping “I” Disease, but I didn’t see any sign of it here.